Pros:
- I love the way it is defined clearly at the beginning of slide 1.
- I also love the clarity of audience.
- Slide 4 is really powerful because it defines the problem clearly and offers a solution.
- I like the constant color theme. Very clear.
- On slide 5, it says it's going to be on a website. Maybe just more clearly define that you want it to be an online collection until you can get it in print. State intentions clearly when it comes to presentation of the product to its consumers.
Unblocked Writers:
Pros:
- Nice title and general theme. I like the sunscreen.
- I love the included audio caption. How did you do that?
- I like that you compare the website to Aderall, though I'm not sure it's necessary to get the point across.
- I like the way your audio is much more elaborate than your slides.
- I love slide 10. Powerful words.
Cons:
- Slides could be a little more detailed. Maybe use some graphics or statistics?
- Maybe make word font a little bigger.
- You could make the word slides a little bit more word-detailed, as well. I love how the audio is more complex, but I think you could vamp it just a bit. You want to attract people. You're building a website. So show me what you can do!
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